Nigh-Gaunt49, as I promised a couple of days ago, this will be my last critique of your work.-The original text:“I can feel it. Some fear and anger I sense.” Corinne tells them as she probes the Baldander’s mind as it leaps, swings and jumps from limb to limb away from them inhumanly fast.”-The edited text:No edit, just a comment. The Baldander’s MIND leaps swings and jumps from limb to limb inhumanly fast?-And in panel two, is Jinx asking Alley if he feels the Baldander’s vibes? Or is she asking Alley if he can swing from vines?-Based on the portfolio you’ve presented here Night-Gaunt49, I would not hire you as a writer, illustrator, or creative director.-You’ve been free in your criticism of the Benders, yet you are either unable or unwilling to apply simple editing to your own work. I believe if you haven’t already done so, you should take a course in creative writing from your local community college. Editing can be learned.-Alternate Alley Oop is borderline plagiarism, which has potential for disastrous effects in either an ad agency or in-house marketing communications department. -You have not given us any indication that you can draw – a vital part of comics-On the positive side, characters you created work well within your stories. In fact, they could easily stand alone, without the link to Alley Oop.-You have said you are able to create story lines, and bring them to closure. I’ll take your word for that. Closure is important in episodic communications.-Doubtless, you and others will wonder about my qualifications to offer this critique. I have a BFA degree in advertising design. I’m retired after 35 years in marketing communications. During the last 20 years of my career I held positions of advertising manager, or marketing services manager at two multi-national firms. I post a weekly website, which I write and illustrate. The site deals mostly with small town politics.