Leave panels 1 and 3 as is – - panel 2 could have been a close-up of the side of Sluggo’s head, jabbed by Nancy’s word balloon. What’s the real emphasis of the gag, Sluggo’s head jabbed or Nancy’s word balloon?
♫ Sticks and stones may break my bones, but word-balloons… ♫
Most of us spend 12 years learning a public-oriented education, and then spend the rest of our lives unlearning many of the same things – - these comments may be a result of that unlearning.
Congratulations, you outdid Jerry Scott and Brad & Guy Gilchrist. Now, if you can outdo Al Plastino…
Spare dialogue for Nancy, usually. All medium shots, the eye tracks across the panels in this strip with no interruption where there doesn’t need to be an interruption or close-up or wide establishing shot…
Yeah, this is more like Nancy.
Something I would expect actual kids to do on their time off from school. Good gag, and well-done. Except for that skewed diving board.
Did you later ask them to walk the plank?
hehe, A friend’s pool had no diving board, so I dove off the roof of their cabana. Needless to say, I was asked not to return.
Today’s was good.
I wish Olivia did a close-up in panel 3, though. Something that registers joy or triumph, contrasts the grumpy disappointment in the final, gag panel
Good today. And the art, while not so Bushmiller-esque, is ever-so-slightly improving…